My goodness that was....dope. I---haha
Heh i thought I wasn't going to like it...
Oh but I did...!!!!!!! It has a midi type of feel to it...I likes it.
I likes that.
Thanks brother. Didn't know you were still around on this site. Can't wait to hear another beat man!
A damn fool.
xD damn yo you prolly see all the messages i sentcha, we need youuuu mang aint no body beats like yours lol lets get famous now.
A flowing river damned before the ocean....
You have seven chords here... The first three are beautiful. After that...well the progression is rather...uninviting. Now I can't really determine the flow of your progressions but honestly some of those later chords seems a better under expressed and random. <<<Not a bad thing, but in my opinion they could have been truly beautiful if thought it more clearly.
Basically the bass notes lose focus...and when that happens the top half usually goes astray. Hell I actually went ahead and put these chords down in FL Studio and...against my better judgement had to finish them in a way I would have...
It's like I can see them...I can see what you wanted but you couldn't quite put it down that way...I don't know if that's the case but it really feels that way...I don't know maybe it's just me.
On a side note...I like the percussion. And the actual melody is rather nice.
Constructively though, God I hate to tell people how I think they should make music...but don't take it that way. I'm not trying to tell you how to make music because by no means am I "a better" beat maker. Whatever better really means. But maybe try, just maybe this helped me alot...making songs with a form. Kind of like they tell a story. When I make my newer music I think if it as a ScreenPlay...with Acts. And a full story. Some of my most popular beats, (ones that sell UP there in the $$$ tree) follow this.
I'm not saying think of it the way I do. As much as making a beat is a feeling...it has to have a solid form. Rather it be a box...a globe...or the universe...have the talent is making others feel what you felt. It's hard to do in music...but when you can do it..That's when people will finally say, "Hey Your really good at this."
I still love the first three chords so much though I can give you a 8...minus 2 for in my opinion confusing me and not completing them...
Yeah that's the terrible version of that song...
Damn I sent you the one without the samples...damn...I'm fucking up. Shit banging though.
Oh look, the n***a who made it all happen arrives.. but yeaaah you told me it was just a preview beat but i was in love with the shit T.T
This is real right here. It's like some classic NYC rap. The sample is relatively crisp. It's a smooth track in general but for the most part I THOUGHT the percussion was little bland though. I like the track though in general, the chord flowed well and the verses were good they just lacked emotion sometimes. But it was hot though. It's real shit. I can appreciate shit like this.
I didn't make the beat
Track: My First Love Remix
Artist: Kenubo feat Seth(KFD)
***It's actually good stuff. I would have balanced the entire track differently though if I was the Myxer/Producer. Your just a bit disconnected from the music sometime. Also smooth out your harmonies and bring the volume on them down a little bit. Those vocals need to be real smooth with this track. Don't hit the harmony so tough, just be smoooth with it. Instead of "You WERE my first love" Try "yoou weeeere my firsttt loove....(fade)" if you can feel what im saying...make it legato so it doesn't follow so heavy on the drums, it needs to flow easily.***
Higher notes carry further and are naturally louder to the ears thus need to be softer or they overpower lower notes, and generally the lower note is more important, as they tend to be the foundation of the harmony chord. I would have used different vocal harmony notes though but for the most part I liked the note selection.
Also I thought your voice as smooth as it was could have had a bit more heart in it towards the middle. The heart was there at the start but emotionally faded out towards the end. Also another sidenote is your voice is on a bit of a low end mic I guess so. So you gotta EQ it and Dynamically Process it.
Honestly towards the center levels, the notes begin to leave your easy-smooth natural level. So I would have lowered the key of the beat so the note peak was a bit lower so you don't have to strain to hit the peak notes on the chorus. It just seemed strained a bit hitting the WEREs and such. Overall though I loved the concept, it would be ten times better if the harmonies were smooth and the voice was EQ to have a higher tonal phase. Love it though.
-The RAP didn't have good lyrics honestly.
-The rhymes themselves were bad in general because they got highlighted, like each word that word rhymed was really underlined, either by direct pauses or the voice being louder. "Doesn't encourage me to remember the lines."
-To many syllables in some of the words I suppose, sounds like speeding through words to get to the next line.
-The stops inbetween the lines for the harmony lines felt forced instead of natural. Like there was nothing else to say, so he stopped: then harmony. "Neither pleasant to listen to or creative." If it was one of those it'd be ok.
-In general raps don't have to rhyme constantly but they need to atleast be poetic in form. This did neither.
-REWRITE. OR ELIMINATE.
-On a creative expressive tone the rap in general didn't do anything for the song and had no feeling behind it. Raps in RnB songs like this need to be smooth like the vocals no exception. Your singing about love, he needs to rap about love and feel it. I feel no emotion, make us feel emotional. First love! Come on that's what's important. Tell a story about her. Her being "FINE" is ok, but the song is deeper then that. Match it emotionally. That's really why I didn't like the rap. It lacked poetic quality and depth.
Overall MIX the track better as far as balance all across the board, harmony lines generally need to be underneath the lead and softer. "I'm not saying that to fit some sort of status quo. I'm saying it because it sounds much better and the quality of the harmonies are more pronouced."
Final Thoughts and Summary.
Vocal Lead-Good needs better balance and EQ. Loved the AD-LIBS though. Those "yeahs and mmms" were soulful. Nice.
*8* RnB truely.
Makes me Nostalgic...
Makes me happy about my younger days as a 16-bit gamer. Nice...just nice...not bad at all Paragon. ^-^
Firstly let's say I liked the track. Ok now, that snare you used...was bad choice. It just didn't fit with the other sounds. everything else is pretty crisp. The same goes for that cymbal/hat thing that hits on the 1st and 3rd beats. The guitars though we're smooth and that bell was nice. Very asian like flavor. And you could have done without the organ in general. All in all the song was in general disjointed and had a strange form. But that's fine for what it is.
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